改写练手【第1期】

乐乐

作为改写区的版主，要好好给大家服务，嘿嘿嘿
现在定期发一些句子，大家自己先改改，
然后下一期会发前一期我改写的版本
当然提供的改写会是通过copyscape检测的

每期3小段

1. I have medium/long straight hair, and I have tried to achieve curls (or at least waves) for YEARS with no luck. I can't seem to figure out hot rollers to save my life, and I always get weird kinks in my hair when I try using regular curling irons. Plus, that just gives me tight "Shirley Temple" curls which isn't really the look I want.

2. After years of distrust, China's government says it wants a new type of great power relationship with the United States. Chinese President Xi Jinping will begin trying to lay the groundwork Friday at a summit with President Obama in California, but just what kind of relationship does Xi want?

3. They include a slowing economic growth rate, a smarter, more critical public, some terrifying environmental problems and a general uncertainty on how the Communist Party will keep China's spectacular rise on track.

心若无尘

看着简单句很多,但是个人词汇量太少,改起来还是力不从心,

wawylysys

实例出现眼前，突然发现不知道怎么改，无从下手额

luguokankan

In recent years, I've been looking for a solution to make my straight hair curly or even waves. However, it seems to me there isn't an easy way to achieve that. I've tried hot rollers but it simply didn't work for me. I've spent a fair amount of money in curling iron tools but as a result, my hair turned kinky instead. To be specific, the outcome of using curling iron is kind of like Shirley Temple curls but it's not what I'm looking for.

哥的英语,虽然不够正宗, 但还算不错吧?

乐乐

luguokankan 发表于 2013-6-8 22:17

                               
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In recent years, I've been looking for a solution to make my straight hair curly or even waves. Howe ...

很厉害 除了 waves 考虑改为 wavy
其它都很棒！ 功力很不错，要不试一试后面两句？

agnes90

luguokankan 发表于 2013-6-8 22:17

                               
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In recent years, I've been looking for a solution to make my straight hair curly or even waves. Howe ...

すごい！❤❤

agnes90

luguokankan 发表于 2013-6-8 22:17

                               
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In recent years, I've been looking for a solution to make my straight hair curly or even waves. Howe ...

英文比不上你了，搜句日文。。。不要告诉我你日语也很好~

浮沉

看了后表示茫然不知所措，哎，英语，硬伤啊。

agnes90

好吧。。。。这么好的栏目，不只是我一个人心生胆怯了。
乐乐版主~~~ 我来捧捧场，不管写得好不好，都给俺多加几分，鼓励鼓励呗~~~

2. The Chinese government is calling for a brand new great power relationship with the United States. After years of tension, the problem is how to manage the distrust between the two countries.  Xi Jingping, the Chinese chairman, is going to push the start with President Obama on Friday's summit, in California, although it's still ambiguous what he means by putting forward this idea.

3. Ahead of the Communist party lay numerous challenges: How to boost economic growth? How to deal with the horrific environment? ? How to propose a more open and diverse society? And, of course, how to maintain a smarter and more critical public image, which people can have faith in.

第一个就不改写啦~~~ 免得和前一个改写产生鲜明的对比！

bestcompact

只看懂八成，要改还路            长的呢

fu288

luguokankan 发表于 2013-6-8 22:17

                               
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In recent years, I've been looking for a solution to make my straight hair curly or even waves. Howe ...

改写，就是加入一些无关痛痒的话。而这些无关痛痒的话，往往反映出写作者的风格。
改写系统，要是能分析结构和语境，在合适的地方插入无关痛痒的话，即可。

colonel_sky

能看懂，改写的话没有之前贴出来的改的好